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Review:Aderyn says:
Hi! Review tag!

You did a great job here building up suspense. I really felt like Hugo, nervous and curious to find out what was happening. Everything happened so fast two, which fits the pace of the plot, at this point.

I can't say much about the characters, but Hugo, for the short time you described him, seems likable and relatively normal. But I'm sure, with this chapter, all of that is about to change.

Towards the end, I got the sense that you switched points of view, because you only use the pronoun "He." While this makes sense for anonymity's sake, it's a bit confusing because both people are male. Maybe call Hugo "the boy" more, or use something to differentiate. Maybe victim?

Overall, this is intriguing. So great job catching the reader's interest! :D Also, you have a gorgeous banner.

Author's Response: Hi.

Yeah, it can get a little confusing. I keep trying to edit that, so it doesn't. LOL. I'm glad you like Hugo. And thank you for reviewing. :)

I love the banner. :)

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