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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
Gilderoy Lockhart had appeared seemingly out of nowhere and now stood between us and the door outside.

^ Oh goodness. I'm not sure if I want to read on. I literally shook my head and said out loud, 'Oh no, not Lockhart,' because he always causes trouble. It astounds me that no one would have caught on that he was a fraud all those years. I mean, how did he act when he was in school? I'm sure if he wasn't capable of doing proper magic after school then he wasn't capable during school.

"Didn't even manage to scrape a Herbology O.W.L. expertise indeed..."

^ Well that answers my question!

I started slightly at his question since I had been strangely mesmerized by the way his thumb had been caressing the twig's smooth bark.

^ There was just something about this line that stood out to me. I really can't say what but hands have never sounded so alluring to me.

Lockhart continues to be one of my favorite aspects about this story. He seems to pop up just about everywhere and is insanely hilarious. I'm surprised anyone actually took him seriously. Actually, I'm surprised that none of the other Professors killed him in his sleep. Imagine him as a ghost? Oh lord.

Severus, Severus, Severus. He treats Avrille like a child with his responses and even though I know the struggle and the way he is feeling I still want to reprimand him. He really needs to learn to mind his manners.

Author's Response: Oh Lockhart, Lockhart, Lockhart. I was the exact same as you, wondering how NO ONE stopped to think, "Um, I went to school with this guy and he was a total moron. HOW did he do all of these things?" Maybe he just Obliviated anyone who commented on it. I imagine Severus probably went to school with Lockhart, though he was most likely several years ahead of the moron, so I'm sure he would have questioned Lockhart's suitability for the post before he even showed up with Avrille. It's just one more nice little nugget of conflict in the background between Severus and Dumbledore that I'm going to take wonderful advantage of later on in the sequel to this story. I think Severus puts up with a lot of Dumbledore's manipulating and errors in judgement since he trusts him so much and considers him almost like a father as well as a mentor, but even he can get pushed too far. Oooh, I'm just so excited to finally be back home so I can write all of this soon! Sorry for the tangent :)

Avrille's probably wishing he was stroking something else...mwa ha ha. Though of course she doesn't actually KNOW that she wants that yet. Severus is still way too scary in her mind. I've always loved men's hands. On the first date I had with my now-husband, I noticed what beautiful hands he had. In the magical world I think hands would have even more of an allure since they are what the magic passes through to exit through a wand. I also think (and am pretty sure there was basis in canon for this) that the most powerful wizards like Dumbledore could probably do some amazing magic with just their hands.

Ack! A ghost Lockhart! That would be even worse than Moaning Myrtle. Lockhart does eventually fade out of the spotlight later on when the focus shifts more to Severus and Avrille actually together, but he does pop up once or twice for some token annoyances. I think later on in the year, Avrille would be much better about knowing how to avoid him.

Severus can just be incredibly rude. I want to smack him as well. He probably wouldn't have been so curt had he known how much Avrille already admired him, but right now all he can think about is keeping her far far away. *sigh* Poor guy.

Thanks for the FOUR new reviews! They were such a joy to read. Hoping with your help I can get this story to over 1,000 which would just be so incredibly COOL. I appreciate so much all the time you're taking to leave me such long ones. I write reviews almost the exact same way you do, looking for little quotes I like and talking about them, so I completely understand how much time you're putting into this. That's why I don't have nearly as high a review post count as I would like. It just takes me so much longer to get through stories since I like to give lots of feedback. So BIG GOLD STAR on your review chart from a very appreciative writer! Take care! ~Renny

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