Hello, WeasleyTwins here to review as requested!
First of all, I LOVE your title. I am a firm believer in interesting, unique, and simply gorgeous titles that really make a story stand out. You've definitely got that with 'Painted Blind.' I also absolutely adore your summary. Not only does that beautiful line come from your story, it has this sort of presence about it - it resonated with me, that's for sure.
I'd like to start off with your description. I think your place descriptions, and more so, your emotional descriptions are phenomenal. There is nothing more powerful than prose that can elicit the same sort of feelings it seeks to convey. I'm a sap - I have these terribly romantic sensibilities and I just adore a good love story. Let me tell you, my dear, that this made me physically hurt, like ache. I could literally feel the emotion in my soul. You've done a fantastic job of using your description to ensnare the reader - it was almost as if I was a part of the story. In 2700 words, you have created a beautiful love story that made me hope and yearn and wish and dream for something so glorious, so similar, something as beautiful.
I thoroughly enjoyed your characterization of Bill. Sometimes, it is difficult to convey the emotions of a man, honestly. They think differently than women, they notice different things and remember different things than we do. A lot of times, a woman who is writing from the perspective of a man loses sight of this and the male character ends up seeming very, very feminine. However, you accomplished something fabulous - you made a man sound like a man. His thoughts, emotions, his observations of Fleur, they are all so...perfect, yes that's it, perfect. My best friend is a man, so I've pretty much figured out how he thinks, and I swear, I thought you were writing from his perspective. It seemed so like him. For your style to elicit such a reaction from me shows your skill as a writer because I connected with it on a personal level - that's not an easy feat, I tell you.
I wanted to point out a few of your more beautiful lines, but it's impossible - they're all so gorgeous! I absolutely and completely enjoyed this oneshot. I didn't see anything that would prompt me to give you any CC (which is phenomenal because I'm such a picky reader). This is definitely going into my favorites. I'm sorry that this was one big ramble.
Absolutely fabulous. 10/10
Author's Response: Oh my goodness, how to even begin to respond to this review? I suppose a large THANK YOU is in order, and even that feels very inadequate!
One of my good friends uses Shakespeare for many of her titles, and I always wanted to, as well. When nothing was sparking inspiration when it came time to titling this, I thought I'd give it a whirl. And that 'Midsummer' quote came into being probably two minutes later!
All the emotions you described are EXACTLY what I, too, look for in a good romance, so the fact that something I wrote made you feel that way -- that's one of the highest compliments I can remember receiving on my writing. :3 Above all, I wanted this to just be a love story, a BillandFleur story, and you seemed to respond exactly the way I'd hoped readers would respond. As an author, that's beyond gratifying to see!
I've never spent a huge amount of time around men except my dad, having no brothers or other close male relatives, and so I'm SO pleased this read as a 'man'. :) That's always a challenge for me, that gender barrier, simply because I don't ever know if it's accurate. And, like you mentioned, the last thing I want Bill to come across as is feminine! :P
This review totally, totally made my day -- and then some! ♥ Seriously, Shelby, I honestly cannot thank you enough for leaving it. And then offering to podcast it -- oh, I am SO excited! I can't wait to see how that turns out! ♥ Thank you so much. :)