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Review:CambAngst says:
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Poor little Bill. I think you captured the existential angst of only children the world over who are suddenly thrust into the role of "responsible" older sibling. It simply isn't fun. One day you're king/queen of the world and the next you're the help.

Babbling Belinda sounded ghastly. You did a terrific job of capturing the unappealing presence of the woman. And the analogy to Arthur coming home drunk was very clever.

And then Bill receives the prophecy. It's clearly not a cut-and-dried "you're going to die" pronouncement, but it's easy to see how it would seem that way to a 4-year-old. I like the poetic bent you put on it.

As far as constructive criticism, maybe you could have given us just a bit more of what was going through Bill's mind as the pondered the prophecy. At the same time, it sounded like he was in shock. So perhaps there will be more of that to come.

I did see one, small typo:

-- "Shed brought her face an inch apart from his so he could almost see his reflection in her eyes." - She'd

Overall, this was nicely done. It flowed smoothly and the characterization felt right for a young child. It definitely makes me want to read more.

Author's Response: Hey, sorry it's taken so long for me to respond. I'm glad that you liked my Bill and I appreciate the pointing out of the typos! Frankly, out of the three that I've written so far for this story, little Bill's chapter has been the funnest :P

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