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Review:CambAngst says:
OK, so unless somebody snaked it from me, this would be your 200th review. Congratulations!

On to the story, it was funny to see Hermione still teaching everyone else spells that they should probably already know. Except, of course, that none of them have properly finished school, but that's neither here not there.

And Ginny was successful in her trial. Somehow, I feel like you should have made that part a little more suspenseful. We've now gone several chapters since anything difficult has happened to the main characters. I think you're going to need to get some drama back into this story soon, otherwise it starts to seem too easy.

Hermione's reunion with her parents felt like it lacked a bit of emotion to me. I think it would have made for a better plotline if you had involved her directly in repairing her parents' memories. For two reasons. First, she was the one who did the original modifications, so there's a nice sort of closure there. And second, because this would have been such an emotional event for her. She sent them away to protect them and at the time she had no idea whether she'd ever see them again. Then she fought a war and prevailed against all odds. Bringing her parents back would be the culmination of everything for her, a huge statement that the magical world and the muggle world are back in sync. You sort of deny yourself this amazing moment by letting the Ministry wizards do all the work and more over do it in such a way that Hermione essentially has to pretend that nothing has happened. This is a scene were you should have gone for the emotional jugular!

The more I read, the more I'm hoping that you really do decide to do some revisions to this story. It could be amazing with a little bit of work!

Author's Response: Plenty of food for thought. Thanks.

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