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Review:CambAngst says:
Back again for more!

The letter from Katherine's father definitely started the chapter off on a down note. Based on the end of the last chapter, it's tough to figure out what to make of the man. It seems like there's the potential for a relationship there, but also an almost insurmountable distance. Strange...

Hmmnn... So Katherine's mother and father did have some sort of relationship at one point in time. That makes things even more complex. You are weaving so many pieces of information together now, some of it conflicting and some complimentary. A great puzzle.

The end of the first scene with Katherine and Michael was disturbing. The boy clearly has a dark, aggressive side to him. I rather hoped to see George or maybe Angelina show up and hex him.

So Katherine's boggart is a... dementor pretending to be her mother? Sorry, that part wasn't clear to me.

And her flashback to whatever it was that transpired between her and Michael. Or George... I was honestly kind of confused, but it was painful to read.

"Besides one word and knowing George Weasley he'd kill Michael." - Well, that's certainly suggestive.

Everything that happens after Katherine gets home just adds to the air of mystery that pervades the chapter. Her great-grandfather's almost-revelation, the memory she views in the penseive... all of it seems to be building toward some sort of big reveal. Is Thorfinn really her father or is it Gideon? Enquiring minds want to know. ;)

I noticed four things in this chapter that you might want to take a closer look at:

-- "Katherine was going to give Selwyn the pleasure of seeing her in a weakened state." - was not going to give?

-- "Well super should be ready soon" - supper

-- "Now little girl watch your tone! I'm you're great grandfather!" - your

-- "Katherine now heard lighting and before her appeared a dark street." - lightning?

Overall, I thought this was a great chapter, although some of her flashbacks were a little too unclear for me. Maybe I'm just being dense or something, but I had a tough time trying to figure out what imagery you were invoking. Still, the story is getting very, very good. Mysteries abound...

Author's Response: Hell CambAngst! Sorry for the late response to this review.

Michael does have his dark side, the part of the dementor-like thingy (< creative isn't it XD) But no it is her mother but at this point she's never seen her mother which is the reason for the cloak, thanks for bringing that up though, perhaps I should write that somewhere in the chapter.

You'll know more about her father soon :P

And sorry for the typos I type faster than what I think, plus I thought I had looked it over. (Thanks for mentioning them though! It makes them easy to find.) I wrote the chapter on a whim which I think makes it so difficult to understand but thank you for your review over the summer I'll take a closer look at this chapter.


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