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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
Ohmygosh I loved this so much!

I just LOVE how you wrote Ron so perfectly - he was so in-canon, and he seemed so very real, with his worrying about not standing out and accidental anger outburst about Scabbers. You got the perfect balance between guilt, worry and anger, which just put me so much in Ron's place!

In fact, you wrote ALL the Weasleys perfectly. Mr and Mrs Weasley were very much the concerned parents, but I love how they related to each other by telling Ron what the other was really thinking. Ginny's reaction when Ron was presented with Scabbers was brilliant, it seemed so natural and it painted such a vivid moment of tension that really stuck with me.

The emotion of the evening all seemed to develop really naturally, too, and you built the nervous atmosphere up so well. And I liked how this had the beginnings of a plotline - with Scabbers and how Ron was trying to prove himself - because once Ron had accepted Scabbers, I thought that it would all be over, but you brought Fred and George's spell into it too! Yay! I thought that it was really clever to do that :D

I adored your style of writing in this, too, as it was descriptive but not too long-winded. It just a perfect atmosphere and I loved it all so much! :3 I honestly haven't felt that much in tune with Ron (especially younger Ron, who's just cuter and easier to empathise with) since I read JKR's actual books! It all just seemed to have that certain feeling, with all the characters perfect and your descriptions so right-on.

Ahh you so deserve more attention for this! 10/10 from me, and good luck in the Ronald Weasley challenge :D
~TGK

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your really, really kind words. I came over all funny when I read this review. This gave me palpitations: "I honestly haven't felt that much in tune with Ron (especially younger Ron, who's just cuter and easier to empathise with) since I read JKR's actual books!"

I'm really glad you felt that I got the balance right between his anger, guilt and worry. if I'd gone too far one way or the other, it just wouldn't have felt like Ron to me! He's a good person, he just happens to react to uncomfortable feelings by lashing out. I was a bit like him when I was a kid, so maybe that's why I feel such a connection with him!

Writing (and reading!) the Weasleys is one of my favourite things ever, I'm glad you think I got them all right! Your comment about Mr and Mrs Weasley really made me smile, as I hadn't even realised that's what they were doing.

It definitely felt weird writing Scabbers as an innocent little rat, knowing what he would turn out to be!

Thank you so very much for your lovely review and for recommending An Ordinary Grey Rat on the forum :) It really meant a lot to me. I had written chapter two, but now I see I have a lot to live up to I think I need to go over it again!

Athene xo


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