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Review:EverDiggory says:
Hm... *thinking*

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*That last line was obviously meant to have some serious meaning, and while it did, it didn't have the information to back it up. We understand that he must have liked her, but theres no reasons as to back it up. I think there should have been something there, because it's just some random, slightly out of place last sentence. Get what I'm saying?

*After Pansy's comment, the "leftovers" one, I think Daphne should have said something. Not only do the Slytherins, Purebloods, and even the Greengrass' have a history for being dignified but slightly defensive, and offensive as well. I definitely think Daphne would have had something to say to that snide little comment! I don't know if you have siblings, but the moment someone even breathes one word against them, it's on. Even if you don't particularly like them--take it from me--anyone who says anything about my siblings will be buried in a shallow grave(;

*The flow was a bit choppy. I would recommend adding some filler sentence to drag it out a bit more, therefor it would flow a lot better.

Alright, here's to some thing I really, really liked!

*Pansy, Pansy, Pansy! She was bitter, she was snide, she was hateful--you had her spot on! Bravo!

*Nice descriptions(:

*I loved how you included Lucius! And not just because i love his character but(;

*Adding how the pureblood families were affected after the war was incredible! It was truly a lovely touch, and it showed that while everything was slowly falling back into place, nothing could ever be quite the same again. I think that was one of my favorite parts!

Ultimately, this was a very enjoyable piece! I think if you take some of my CC points into consideration, you'll be golden!

All my love,

Ever

Author's Response: Hey!
Thanks for the constructive criticism, I'll keep it in mind when writing some more. Glad you enjoyed it, since you love the Malfoys

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