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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hey there!

I like Aurora, she is un-cliched but I think I know where the story is going...well at least, about her and Sirius anyway. I also like how she's not that close with Lily, to be honest I'd almost had enough of those plots.

I like your style of writing, but sometimes you just put on a little bit of too much background information. Maybe its just me that's used to minimalist descriptions from most of the authors...but yeah I thought I'd just voice that out.

Another thing I noticed was that, Lily didn't have friends from what I take...or maybe I just didn't read clearly. In any case, don't make Lily a loner...because I don't think she'll be that hostile to anyone else but the Slytherins and the Marauders.

In any case, I like where the story is going so far though I don't know where it'll be centred around..young love, perhaps? I love your descriptions! So realistic and gah...so wonderful.

Ta,
CloakAuror9 xx
Recenseo 2012

Author's Response: I'll definitely work on the overload of background info...I struggle to find the balance between putting it in for character development and still keeping the right pacing. So thanks for the tip!

And good to know about Lily's loner-status...definitely will work to avoid that as well!

Thanks so much for the feedback again, it is much appreciated! :)


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