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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Hi! Here with your requested review :) I'm going to work at keeping this a tad more professional than "oh my god one of my favorite authors writing my favorite character!"-- But we'll see if I can manage. :p

Right away you set the stage with such a lovely introduction of Remus waking up alone with subtle reminders of Sirius. As with all of your writing, your Imagery is unbelievable. You just have the way of painting such a vivid feeling with the visions you give the reader, and it shows here.

The moment at James and Lily's graves really, for me, was the defining moment of setting the emotion of the piece. This, I think more than the beginning, set in place how alone in the world Remus was left after the loss of his friends. That sense of loss, for me, is one of his defining characteristics and it was good to see that come through here.

I must tell you.. Remus/Tonks is my otp; so take my opinions on the Tonks part with that in mind. For the sake of the Remus/Sirius ship, the idea of Remus' thoughts being accidentally (more or less an accident) on Sirius, even on such an important day, was a very interesting and beautiful way to highlight the history the pair shared.-- Going back to your concerns, I think this moment (along with the grave part) made the ship believable. Now, personally my little Remus/Tonks heart is screaming "No! No!" but you've made it believable to even me, so fantastic work there. Remus' characterization really shined through here with the worry about Teddy being like him, and I think the birth of his son was a defining moment for him in the way you wrote it.

And, the final battle. The one thing I would have liked to see is a bit more of a reaction when he realizes Tonks came anyway. Even if it is forced through his thoughts of Sirius, I think something, even if it is just about Teddy, a little bit more is needed. It could even go back to the 'living for the moment' in the fact that she had to join him, reminding him again of Sirius. Of course, just an opinion, in the end it's up to you. :) I liked Harry here-- it was a small bit of that childhood that JKR shows at the moment of the stone peeking it's way through. Otherwise, I thought the ending was a very beautiful way to bring the story full circle in him 'picturing' Sirius dueling next to him.

Honestly though, I thought this was fantastic. I had been meaning to read this when I first noticed you posted it, but life has been a little insane this week so I was happy when you requested it! I know this probably wasn't very helpful, but it was truly an enjoyable read. Thanks for requesting!

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for coming by, and I apologize that my response has taken a while.

That graveyard scene was one of the original inspirations for the piece. Months ago, when I first got this plunny, it was a little different; I had wanted Remus to take Sirius to the Potters' grave so that Sirius could properly say goodbye to his friend (since he was tied up in legal proceedings shortly after the murders). I'm very happy that you found it so moving.

I actually requested specifically from you because I know you love Remus/Tonks and I knew I could count on you to give me honest feedback on that aspect of this story :D That said, it really means a lot to me that you still found it effective. I know how hard it can be to take my 'OTP Goggles' off and really critically evaluate a story that separates the members of my favorite ship, so I sincerely appreciate you giving this a shot for me.

I think you make a valid point about the final battle. Although this piece was focused on Remus and Sirius, I did have lingering feelings after writing it that maybe I should have focused a little more on the Remus/Tonks ship as well. Perhaps that's a project for another day, you know? Thanks for your feedback.

Your compliments, as always, really warm my heart. Thanks again for your very kind review :)

-Amanda


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