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Review:CambAngst says:
Interesting. Based on the first chapter, I was thinking we'd have more of a Harry/Ginny story, but the biggest subplot so far seems to be more of a Hermione story. It's a very unconventional choice, and I applaud you for that. She's always cast as the stable, quiet one in canon-based stories, the one who talks others out of doing impulsive things.

I'm still having a bit of a hard time drawing a bead on the dynamic you're trying to create between Harry, Ron and Ginny and Mr. and Mrs. Weasley. In the last chapter, Mrs. Weasley doesn't say a thing about the three of the apparating away to find Hermione and in this one Mr. Weasley is reading them all the riot act for doing it. His character felt kind of odd, in general. The way that he more or less says to them, "I've had a tough day at the office, now leave me alone," didn't sound like him. Sorry to keep harping on this point, but overall you've done such a terrific job of keeping everyone in character that small deviations are really noticeable.

Mr. Weasley mentions the Trace, which actually made me think of something else about the last chapter. Ginny is underage, but she uses her wand to open the door to Hermione's house. Shouldn't that have alerted the Ministry? Not a big deal, but it stuck out.

And you've given Hermione a new potential love interest. One more thing to try to lure her away from her life in the wizarding world. You're constructing a very elaborate, intricate and involved story, and I like how you're willing to be ambitious and challenge people's closely-held ideas.

Author's Response: Thank you.

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