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Review:CambAngst says:
Things seem to be continuing to come along nicely in your story. I liked that fact that nerves are still a little frayed and tempers are short. So soon after the end of the war, it seemed like a realistic way for people to be. To me, you handled Harry and Ginny's row just about right. Ginny certainly still has a lot of insecurities that she's trying to come to terms with, and she basically admits that's why she and Harry wound up in bed together. So I think their relationship is going to be touch-and-go until she works her way through it all.

I'm struggling just a bit to reconcile the way that Harry, Ron and Ginny were treated in the last chapter with the way that everybody just up and apparated away to look for Hermione. Molly didn't seem to take much exception in this case, which felt inconsistent to me.

I also found it a bit strange that Harry was able to walk right into Gringott's and make a withdrawal, considering the circumstances of his last visit and more particularly his means of exit. I would have imagined that the goblins would still be very upset with Harry. In fact, I would have imagined that the building would still be undergoing repair. Not a big thing, but I think it at least could have been mentioned.

The bit of detective work that Harry and Ginny do was interesting, and I liked the dynamic between the two of them. I thought Harry's reaction to Ginny's revelation was maybe a bit too subdued. Not that I expected him to last out at her, but I do think he should have pressed her a little more for the specifics of their spat, just so he knows what to tell Ron.

Again, your writing was pristine. No typos or grammatical problems. Nicely done!

Author's Response: I think what you are highlighting here is indicative of the niaivete of my early (2005) efforts. You have me, for the first time, considering substantial edits and re-writes.

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