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Review:CambAngst says:
Another very nice chapter. Your writing is very good. Technically solid, free from distracting typos and grammatical problems, and everything flows nicely. Your balance between dialog and narrative is good, and the characters sound like themselves when they speak.

So one thought I had while reading this is that the way that the adults are treating Harry, Ron, Hermione, Neville and Ginny to a lesser extent seems a bit over-protective. These are young adults who just finished defeating history's darkest wizard and his followers and suddenly Molly is chastising them for taking a walk and the Order is excluding them from closed-door meetings. Maybe this is a conflict you're planning to take up in later chapters but at the moment it felt a bit odd.

For Fred's funeral, I thought it was really nice that you found a way to include everyone, even Neville, Dean and Seamus, in some way or other. In a lot of the post-DH fics I've read, all of the characters except for the Trio+Ginny seem to rapidly fade away. And I will nit-pick you just a bit for Luna's apparent disappearance. I hope that you can continue to be inclusive as the story evolves.

I really like this. I'll see if I can find time to read and review more today, work permitting.

Author's Response: I do pride myself on my spelling, (even without Spellcheck). As for grammar, if it makes sense when I read it then it's fine.

Molly and the Order have not made the transition to thinking of them as adults and after a night like they've just had to disappear for four hours is a bit thoughtless.

Luna comes to more prominence later.

I love the way you write reviews, it's an object lesson.

Thanks for taking the time.


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