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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! It's me again!

Characterization: Well, I like that Hermione isn't boy-crazy like everyone else! I think you've stayed true to her character. But why was she so willing to help Draco all of the sudden? It was a bit random...

Descriptions: Hmm...well, again, I couldn't really see the setting in this chapter. If you could describe things better, it might help readers to really SEE what's happening.

Emotions: Well, I got Hermione's frustration really well. If there were supposed to be other emotions, I missed those. :]

Plot: Yay, Hermione/Draco moments! And Valentine's Day is over. Thank God. This story is moving REALLY fast though. It's already March and it's only chapter six! Wow! I hope things don't get too rushed...we'll see in future chapters.

Interactions: Well, I really liked the friendship moment between Hermione and Ginny, but I almost felt like it was rushed. I feel like it should be extended and Ginny should comfort Hermione more about Ron. Or something like that. And the interaction between Draco and Hermione was a little odd. He's still TRYING to be mean, but he's sort of in between with his actions. I wonder how you'll make him change enough to be believable. :]

Pacing: The story has progressed quickly through the school year, but it hasn't seemed too rushed yet. I hope that continues. :]

So far, you're doing very well. Take a look at the characterization and emotion things I mentioned and I'll read more soon!

--Emily

Author's Response: I'm trying to make it through the school year rather quickly because the end of the school year is going to need a few chapters and really not much happens in the time frame besides school work and such. I hope that you continue to think that its not rushed as you continue reading on. Thank you so much for the review and as I've already said in another review I will try to work on adding in more description.

~Slytherinchica08~

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