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Review:LadyL8 says:
Hello there. Sorry again for being late, I have been sick.

Anyway, I love how you change point of view a few times in this chapter (like the last one). It gives me, as a reader, the opportunity to see every character and understand them better. It provides a great characterization and depth to your characters.

I absolutely LOVED the part from Sirus' POV. His and James' comments to the male prefect were simply hilarious, and so much in-character to what we know about them from that time. I love how they are persistent, and keep annoy the prefect from the very first day. And it interesting that the prefect was Crouch. I loved it.

As for Remus' part. I love how you characterize him. You see him act a certain way with his friends, but from his thoughts you see that he doesn't necessarily mean everything he says and does. He is a complicated character, that just wants to fit in, and you portray that amazingly. You can see that he's trying so hard to fit in, and that he is kind of nervous about his past and his secret. I also loved that Peter, Remus and Sirius all seem to have something they're embarrassed or uncomfortable talking about. And the best part is how oblivious James is. And now I'm talking like it's real, so you obviously did well with this part.

But my favorite part was Peter's part. I just pity him so much after reading this chapter, and like I mentioned in the last review, I have ALWAYS hated him. But you write him so realistic, and I just see a bit of myself in him. He is just such a misunderstood character that was bullied by so many people. I just want to jump straight into your story and befriend him right now :P You have officially changed my heart about him.

The last part with James just completed the awesomeness of this chapter. I love how he senses that something is a bit weird, something about Sirius and the letter. And I absolutely love it when Sirus and him meet Snape and Lily, and James doesn't say a word during the whole encounter. His part was amazing.

But my favorite thing about the whole chapter is probably Crouch. I love how he's so angry at the boys all the time, and how he keeps yelling at them. I can imagine them making their prefect hate them already the first days of school. Great job with the chapter; I loved it :)

Author's Response: I'm so so so sorry for this extremely late reply! I've just finished my last exam which means I finally have time to respond to your lovely review and start writing the next chapters! :)

Well thank you very much - the four POVs will hopefulyl continue until the story has finsihed, it means that it can easily carry on when one of them dies! :)

Oh! I'm glad you think they're in character - it's always my sole aim to make sure they come across to fit everyone's head canon. :) Haha - all will be revealed soon! (well not all, otherwise there wouldn't be a plot ;).) James is hilarious to write - he really has no idea, does he? Don't worry - I'm starting to think of them as real when I explain about their actions! haha!

My opinion on Peter changes a lot - he's always had difficult background in my opinion, but it's trying to find what would make him betray his friends in such a way. I'm not saying much - but Peter's journey is going to be the most interesting! :)

Thank you so much for your kind review - and I'm really sorry for not replying immediately! I hope you continue to enjoy the story! :)

Keira :)

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