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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you! :D So, let's go over things:

Characterization: Well...Cygnus is as ridiculously evil and creepy as always. I'm glad to see you didn't break your stride with him. And Regulus is very vulnerable which fits his situation perfectly. Well done. I was sad the Marauders weren't in this chapter, but fillers are always necessary. :]

Descriptions: I definitely could see and hear everything happening in this chapter. You did a very good job of describing things to bring them to life. Well done!

Emotions: Hmm...well, I think I definitely got to feel Cygnus's ambitious feelings, as well as Regulus's sadness. And I'm starting to see a hint of bitterness in his feelings towards Sirius. :/ That makes me sad.

Plot: Dang. Cygnus is now king. That's upsetting. But I'm glad the plot is moving along and things are starting to fall into place. I'm interested to see how things will go with Sirius as he grows up away from his kingdom...

Style: You kept a very appropriate, consistent style throughout this chapter again. I'm always delighted that you don't waver from the stylistic choices you make. It helps the story a lot that you're consistent. :D

Good job with another well-written chapter. Keep up the good work!

--Emily

Author's Response: Hi!

I love creepy Cygnus. He's so much fun to write. Regulus is also a great character to write. He's so innocent and naive.

Don't worry - there will be plenty of the Marauders in the next chapter. It alternates if you hadn't noticed. :)

Regulus is slightly bitter towards Sirius abandoning him and that'll sort of help with his feelings as he gets older too. But things will work out in the end, don't worry.

Haha, yeah, it's pretty sad that Cygnus is now king. He's going to change so much, it'll be interesting to see how people react to everything he has in mind.

I'm glad you thought I was consistent. It's such a concern when you go months between updating. Hopefully I'll manage to write a good amount this summer to make up for my lack of time during the school year.

Thank you for your review. It's definitely pushing me to get updating!


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