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Review:DracoFerret11 says:

Grammar/Spelling: There were a few issues with spelling/grammar, but nothing chapter-killing. You can probably catch the mistakes if you do a quick read through.

Characterization: I HATE THIS SIRIUS. I HATE HIM SO MUCH! UGH. You have no idea how angry I am with him right now. I can't stand how he's behaving. I definitely wasn't expecting this. I'm SO on Capri's side now. She can beat him senseless and I won't care. Part of me hopes this isn't even Sirius. They ARE brewing Polyjuice, after all...maybe someone stole some. I doubt it.

Descriptions: I think you did well enough to let this chapter translate. I got enough to know what was going on. I'm still furious with Sirius. Ugh.

Emotions: Well...I feel frustration. So, I think that's what Caprice is feeling. So...well-translated. I'm furious with Sirius. He's such a pig all of the sudden! UGHHH. (Do you feel my anger? 'Cause I don't think I'm hiding it too well...)

Plot: WHAT THE HECK? Sirius is NOT like this! He can't do this. It'll ruin everything! This was a well-written chapter, as always, but I'm still upset at how things are going now. :/ Though, I LOVED the line, "Sometimes pieces of our world crash down so fast it feels for a moment as if youíre free falling through space. Where gravity still has no hold on you and reality is a bleak horizon you can choose not to believe in. Only for a moment..." Very good job. I feel really bad for what Caprice has to go through now, with Sirius being crazy.

Interactions: Ugh. Sirius. The Quidditch training scene made me want to punch him in the face. He was so rude to Cappie. And if that Mia girl really tells Jason that this was Cappie's fault, I'm going to be really upset. I feel so bad for Caprice. If Jason ditches her right now, it'll just make things that much worse. I don't even LIKE Jason, but now he's one of Cappie's only supports.

Pacing: Well, the plot took a curve again! I can't believe that Sirius is acting like this. I'm so frustrated. I wonder how things are going to ever improve after this. :/

Well done, again. And thank you so much for mentioning me in your dedication! :] I'm really touched. Please come back to the review thread and request again once you've updated. I would love to read more. :D


Author's Response: I LOVE that your frustration and anger is showing in practically every single line! haha don't fret my dear, you'll see Sirius be more himself in the future chapters.

Also not all people have healthy ways of dealing with issues. I suppose I thought it was pretty realistic for Sirius to be a world-class jerk when things weren't going his way and he clearly wasn't getting the girl (although this is not going to help at all!) So by all mean take a bat to his head but just know that the situation is temporary and someone will knock sense into him preferably without scarring him permanently :)

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