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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hey...it's me again. This chapter was just...I have no words. I'm going to think of some, but right now...I feel like crying. I feel like crying so, so much. Let's start with simple things and then move to other thoughts:

Grammar/Spelling: I noticed a few grammar errors (like once you used "you're" instead of "your"), but other than that, I didn't see anything too awful.

Characterization: So much happened in this chapter. Let's start with the easy ones--as always, I love the Marauders. I feel really bad for Remus. He's having such a hard time. Peter's quite good, too. I love that you haven't ignored him. He's actually pretty sweet. And James is wonderful. I was surprised to see that he hasn't told his friends about how much he loves Lily. I would have thought he would be asking them ways to convince her to be with him. But he was so sad when Sirius was talking about Lily. His embarassment and sadness really gave him depth. It was great.

Now, Sirius and Caprice. Just...wow. This story always strikes me during chapters like this one. Sirius was absolutely wonderful, as always. His friendship with Caprice is so amazing. He just...he loves her so much. And he puts her first, even though it hurts him. And just...wow. My emotions are so vivid right now. It's so sad. He's the nicest character ever, and he's hurting because of her. And she's not fixing it. And that's just depressing.

Caprice is wonderful as well. I'm glad you mentioned that she was conflicted in that moment where she felt like kissing Sirius, but remembers Jason. JASON: GTFO. SERIOUSLY. Moving on: I really love your characters, all of them. And Caprice just...she needs to get with Sirius. He WILL treat her right. I know he will. And just...wow. I'm so sad right now!

Emotions: EMOTIONS. YES. THOSE THINGS. PAIN. SADNESS. Okay...but really, I loved how much this chapter made me feel. I think you did an amazing job of translating everyone's emotions, from Remus's amazing friendship with Sirius to Sirius's sadness when it comes to Cappie and how he can't be with her. I just...I felt everything and it was wonderful. You did a terrific job.

Plot: Why aren't they together? :'[ Tears. But I love the plot development. You're doing wonderfully in showing the suspense and emotions of all the characters. I wish Caprice and Sirius were together, but I understand why they aren't yet. :/ Great job with pacing. Wonderful job with flow, especially with switching between points of view. I like that you've brought the war into the story. Good job.

Interactions: These are, by far, the best part of the story. I love that I can see the friendships between everyone. I ADORE the interaction between Sirius and Remus, and I really liked the conversation between Sirius and Capri, even though it made me want to cry. Overall, though, you did a really amazing job, as always. I love what you're doing with this story.

This was an absolutely wonderful chapter. You impress me with how realistic these emotions are. I'll read more soon, after I stop feeling like crying.

--Emily

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