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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there! So, I'm finally here - sorry it took so long, life has been pretty hectic lately. First off, thank you so much for the little mention at the bottom of the one-shot - I really didn't expect it at all, and it really does mean a lot that you liked my story that much :D So, thank you!

Moving on! I lovedlovedloved the idea for this. Myself I've written Bellatrix as a teenager and as a child, but I've honestly never thought of doing one where she's in Azkaban. It's such an interesting idea - how she went insane, what it was like in there - and I felt you captured it perfectly. The whole idea of Azkaban - the stone walls, the sea surrounding it, the dementors constantly floating around - was just perfect. I was imagining the shots of Azkaban from the movies when I read it - I could easily see it happening as part of a film. It was great. Also, you really got the feel of Azkaban, I thought. The idea that it was pretty much inescapable, plus the bleak location and surroundings, and the way it drives its prisoners mad. It was really pretty creepy (and things don't generally creep me out, so kudos :P).

Ah, Bellatrix! She's absolutely my favourite character in the whole series (such a coincidence, lol) and I loved how you portrayed her in this! She was just... so real. I could see HBC acting like this as her, I could imagine the character thinking like this and acting like this and doing those sorts of things - reacting like that. Honestly, yours was probably one of the best Bellatrixes I've read in a long time (and I've read a lot, seriously. On a side note, I'm not entirely sure what the plural of Bellatrix is... anyway...).

Voldemort was good too - he was absolutely creepy and cold and evil and just... well... him. I don't think he seemed off at all - maybe a bit more screen-time for him would have allowed you to develop his character more and pick up problems, I dunno... but, no, I couldn't think of anything wrong with him when I read it. He seemed so like the one in the book - just almost gliding everywhere, stopping behind people to freak them out before asking them something... it was really good.

And Roddy. Dear, dear Roddy :P Obviously he wasn't in it for much (and, being a secret Roddy/Bella fan, I must frown at you for that ;) ), but I felt you developed him enough for the one-shot, considering how it was mostly focused on the one-sided Bella/Voldemort aspect. He seemed real, which was good.

Honestly, I thought the second person worked perfectly here. I really liked the way you used it to get inside Bellatrix's mind - it worked partly because she is insane, and who really knows how her mind works, but also it fitted with the one-shot. I dunno... I've never actually read something in second person other than going over my own stuff for mistakes, so sorry! :P (I feel very unhelpful, lol) Seriously, though, I don't think it would have worked anywhere near as well if it had been in first or third person.

Also, I loved the use of the flashbacks. The actual present-day stuff was fairly every-day sort of thing, you know - not hugely full of plot until the end - and the flashbacks were relating to (certainly what she would consider, I imagine) pretty important events in her life. The combination worked really well, and it was interesting to see the differences between her then and her now, as well as the similarities.

I loved the descriptions as well - just had to mention those! They were flawless - really in-depth, really good. I could imagine everything pretty much perfectly.

I really, really enjoyed it (and will add it to my favourites once I've finished typing this). It was practically perfect :D

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hey Aph! Thanks for coming by this story! I'm glad you liked it! And your welcome; you totally deserved that shout out. :)

Oh my. This review is one of the best reviews ever! I haven't ever had anyone give me such amazing compliments! Thank you so much! You've made my life and not just my day! I can't believe you actually thought of it to be a part of a film! E! Thank you!

I've always thought of Bellatrix as a very complex character to write. I'm so glad you thought I nailed it. And NO! You seriously thought that?! THANK YOU! I'm on cloud nine! It means so much to me to know that someone who's favourite character is Bella thinks mine is the best one they've read. I seriously can't believe. I'm jumping up and down in my chair at the moment! :D

No you aren't being unhelpful at all, I promise. I'm glad that you thought that second person seems to work nicely here. You're right, when I wrote this one-shot, I couldn't imagine it being better than it is in second person. I agree with you that it captures Bellatrix's personality the best.

The descriptions! They matter a lot to me and I can't tell you how good I feel right now! It's like.. WOW! Thank you thank you thank you! SO MUCH!



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