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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

So I really had no idea what to expect when I clicked on this and I was pleasantly surprised. You write very well. The story flowed nicely and it was an easy read. I thought you had a good mix of dialog and narrative and you write Tam's inner monologue very well.

The pink hair immediately made me think of Tonks, although the story clearly has nothing to do with her. Nevertheless, it was an easy image to get my head around, as were most of the visuals you were painting. You're good with small details, like the rugs and floors in the common room. They add a lot of richness to your writing.

I thought your characters were very believable. Each of them sounded about right for their age, and you had a nice range of personality types. I didn't find your characterization of the Potter-Weasley children boring or cliche, which is a rarity in Next Gen romance stories. I really, really hope that you can keep it going as you broaden and advance the story.

As far as constructive criticism, I don't have all that much to offer at this point. You're very early in the story and mostly all I can say is keep up the good work. I noticed one small typo:

-- "As if she didnít she know, that the bugger could be very persistent." - As if she didn't know?

Author's Response: Yay, go Gryffies! Thanks for the review. =)

I was bit worried about the comparison to Tonks when I started to write this story, but then Tam just emerged and took over my story. I think her quirky personality will win people over. =)

Since this is just going to be a novella, I think that there won't be every single one of the Wotters around. I do hope though, that ones that we will meet, will be memorable and hopefully not very cliche. =)

Thanks for noting the typo. Sometimes one just becomes blind to one's mistakes. I gotta read it through again.


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