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Review:HappyMollyWeasley says:
As I started to read this chapter I got still more confused. Why is she living with a bunch of dancers? Are they all wizard dancers?

We got to know a little more about this Guardian thing, but I'm still curious. I picture it's quite different from Aurors? Especially since she writes novels to earn money (!)

I like the interaction between Hermione and Jamie. The dialogue is great, and we get to know them a little bit.

OMG, what a creepy Halloween party... And that Richard seems to be someone to watch carefully. I guess that we'll be seeing more of Aidan later on, too? Okay, there are obviously still lots of mysteries here, now adding the vampire theme too. I guess I'll just have to keep reading to find out. ;-)

Your writing is good, and your story has a good pace and is interesting. But I would like to get some background information in the next few chapters. Why is Hermione there? Has she left her old life completely? Why? How does she feel about it? How old is she now? What is a Guardian?

It will be interesting to find out where you are taking this story in your later chapters. :-)

Author's Response: Thank you for the insightful review. I am glad that you are finding the story interesting. I obviously need to go back and clarify quite a few things during my edits this week. The reason for living with the dancers, one is because of the cheap rent and two the large living room that makes practicing much easy. I guess the reasons that I gave in the story wasn't clear enough so I will make sure to fix that.
You brought up a lot of very good questions and I thank you for that because now I know what areas I need to work on to make this story better.
We will be seeing more of Richard, and Aiden as the story goes along. The incident at the party will also become quite important to the story line as the next chapter unfolds.


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