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Review:magicmuggle01 says:
Hi.

Here I am with your requested review.

This is a nice story. I like your interrpertation of how Arthur and Molly meet for the first time. It kind of seems proper.
Though I don't think an important person like the Minister for magic would be interviewing people for lowly jobs for catering, He'd more likely be doing interviews for heads of departments. I'd maybe change that to Arthur doing the interviewing of Molly (as I read this, that was what I expected) and then something clicking into place.
I feel you could have gone into more detail with the feelings of Molly, maybe a few lines describing how she arrived at the Ministry that day, and her nervousness gripping her from the moment she woke up to the moment she arrived at the Ministry. And instead of the voice sounding bored, have it booming out Molly's name (is it Arthur calling Molly's name?) and startling her back to reality. That way you give more impact to your story.
Overall though I do like this little one shot and give you 8/10.

Author's Response: Well I wrote this in a rush, and I was a little preoccupied, so I'm sorry it's not perfect. No it's not Arthur calling Molly's name. I wrote it how I wanted to and I am fine with it but I am sorry that you aren't. Thanks for the review.

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