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Review:CambAngst says:
Hey, Ash!

I noticed your new story after you mentioned it in your review, so I decided to check it out. It's definitely unlike anything else I've read on this site, at least so far. I think that a lot of the references you were making were outside of my sphere of fandom knowledge, so I can't offer much on those, but I did like the parts that I was able to follow.

You put Hermione in the most interesting situations, well outside of the norm for HP fan fic. I'm not sure yet what it means to be a Guardian, but based on the way she chased away the vampire-type guy, I assume it's some sort of powerful magical enforcer. Honestly -- and you'll probably laugh -- the first thing that popped into my head was Tommy Lee Jones in Men In Black.

Her technique for getting rid of the reporter was funny. I really wish that you'd written out some of the dialog because it sounded like it would have been hilarious. It was very clever, the way that she didn't deny being a witch but rather took the whole idea to its most ridiculous extreme.

Let's see, who else pays a visit? The gypsy lad who was being chased by the vampire guy was curious. He was obviously magical to some extent, but it's unclear how. And the final visitor who seemed to be pursuing the vampire was dark and alluring and mysterious. You really seem to like that type of male lead in your stories!

I did see a couple of things that seemed like typos to me:

"in a store that smelled like apple pies backing, and maybe they would tell that person a thing or two." - baking?

"My dog for my last one and I haven’t felt very lucky since. Of course it wasn’t so lucky for the rabbit, now was it?" - Did you mean to say that the dog ate it?

Overall, though, your writing was very clean and flowed very nicely.

So, in summary, I freely admit that there were a lot of things going on that I just didn't follow, but I assume that they'll clear up with the benefit of time and further reading. I remember getting started with both of your other two stories, and I have to say that your writing has improved by leaps and bounds! This was a pleasure!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I do like to plan out stories that I haven't read before and that I am able to include Hermione into it. The more stories I read when doing reviews the more inspired I get to challenge myself with writing stories that are different from anything I have ever written.
I was worried that there might be too much little details in this chapter but couldn't really take anything out. I am planning to edit all my stories this coming week while I am visiting family so maybe I will be able to expand things a bit to make it a little less confusing.
Thank you for pointing out the typo's I didn't even realize that I had made them. I will be sure to go fix them as soon as possible.
Chapter 2 should be up any day now and I am hoping that the extra details in the chapter will clear up some of the details in this chapter.

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