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Review:Ashling586 says:
Here with your review request. My first impression from this story was that Bill was dying and was seeing flashes of his life. Each little section was more like little flashes with the bare amount of details. Each one could easily be expanded into a chapter each, and have a short story on your hands. I liked the insight into how bill was feeling in each of the flashes.
Overall it was a nice job. The characterization of Bill I thought was really nice and gave me a different perspective of bill that I didn't have before reading your story. However, I have to admit that I found the flow of the story a bit disjointed.
Good job.

Author's Response: Oh, well -- no, I did not write this with the intention of having Bill be near death, although I can certainly see how you might have thought that. :) That's an interesting perspective! I suppose expansion is possible, although I'm more than comfortable with leaving this as a one-shot.

The story was supposed to be a bit disjointed, and I think that's more of a stylistic thing than anything. It wasn't written to flow seamlessly together. ;) Thanks so much for the speedy review, and I'm glad you enjoyed Bill's characterization, too! Glad you liked it!

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