Alright so I've heard you were a great writer around the forums, but I hadn't yet gotten a chance to check out some of your work. Let me tell you that this one shot completely lived up to all the expectations I had.
The characterization of Bill was great. His complete love for Fluer was really sweet, and fit, I think, perfectly with what we know of him in the books.
Also I liked your characterization of Fluer. I have seen some fics that play her up as some kind of super controling snappy cheerleader type character. You seem to have keyed into the Fluer that got picked for the Triwizard Tournament. She seemed brave, supportive, and loving as I imagine she would be.
My favorite part was when you described his feelings while they were in shell cottage post wedding. It was interesting to see all of Bill's feelings as Ron and then later Harry and Hermione pass through.
I didn't see any attribution to a beta, but it certainly seemed like it had been beta'd to perfection because I didn't see any mispellings or grammar issues throughout.
Now I had an extremely hard time trying to find something to critique, but alas as this was requested I feel like it would be wrong to leave with out finding some type of concrit. So after searching for the better half of fifteen minutes I indeed found one really tiny thing. Towards the very end when Fluer says "We will be allright" you left out her accent. That is literally all I could find that might need fixing.
Anyway this was an amazingly good one shot, keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Oh! I can't imagine who's told you that -- but nevertheless, I am so, so flattered that it seems to have reached your ears one way or another. :) I'm very glad you enjoyed this piece, and that you thought Bill and Fleur were characterized well. I put a lot of effort in my writing, consciously or no, to get everyone as in canon as possible.
I actually didn't have a beta for this; it's very rare that I send something off to a beta, actually. I don't know if that sounds conceited or not, and I hope it doesn't, but I'm generally secure enough in my own writing to let readers find flaws, should they exist. Toujours Padfoot is listed as my trilogy beta simply because I plot hash with her forever, and she gives endless amount of support for that story. :) But anyway, what I suppose I'm trying to say is -- since I'm my own beta, thank you!
I do know what part you're talking about, and I think the confusion comes from this: When a French person would say those words, they wouldn't necessarily be accented. ;) When I write Fleur or Madame Maxime, or whoever, I speak in my head with a French accent and alter any words I change verbally. In the instance of that sentence, nothing sounded changed, so I didn't overcorrect. (I hope that makes sense!)
This was a very, very lovely review, and I am so glad to have received it. And again, I'm so happy you enjoyed it! ♥