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Review:maskedmuggle says:
Well, this was a nice sequel :) I think you got most of the Harry/Hermione story right, and I did like your plot here too. Again, a few doubts about characterisation, unless you were aiming for them to be a little less canon. I thought there could have been more of an emotional response from Ginny when she found out about Harry + Hermione - that whole conversation felt a little bland, just back and forth words. I think there were a few lines of dialogue of Harry and Hermione's that didn't quite manage to capture the essence of their character, but for the most part, it was great. I also found it just a little bit unrealistic for Hermione to have twins they/nurses didn't know about, and for Harry to make up the name of Jason spontaneously.

Other than that, it was great to read this follow-on from part 1, and I did like the progression throughout the story, from Harry's proposal, telling Ron/Ginny (Ron's reaction and conversation was much more believable), the slightly odd yet interesting Draco moment, and to the happy ending. Nice work :)

Author's Response: I always try to make the characters a litlle (sometimes a lot) different to canon. I like to imagine how they would be if something in their lives happens that changes them, or if they were just slightly different. As a rule I try not to get too far away, for example, no matter what I do with Hermione, she will always be highly intelligent.

As for the twins, let's assume that Hermione skipped her ultrasound appointment.

Ginny's reaction was muted because she was carrying her own load of guilt because of Neville.

I'm glad you enjoyed both parts. Hope I'll hear from you again.
Thanks for reviewing.


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