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Review:maskedmuggle says:
Ooh I quite liked this! I'm neutral about Harry/Hermione - I can see it work and not work, depending on how someone writes this. In this, although I thought one or two lines Hermione said felt a bit out of character, overall I thought you made it quite believable. :) It was definitely an unexpected plot - I wasn't expecting a Harry/Hermione plot with so much - the tent, the end bit and the possible implications..

I really loved the parting words they said to each other - it felt very realistic for those times. Since the only thing I had doubts about in this chapter was a few of Hermione's dialogue, here's why:
It just feels a bit unrealistic and out of character for Hermione to say these things:
"I came very close one night to getting into bed with you.. [to the end of that dialogue]" --- (slightly confused - didn't it happen though?)
"I've been thinking about this a lot lately, and I donít want to die a virgin. I want to know what itís like to be loved by a man."

Other than that, I thought this was a great Harry/Hermione story :) I think I will go read the sequel now! Nice writing :)

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it. It's all my own work except the final parting, those words came from Shakespeare and he was a tad better at writing than I am.

I hope you enjoy part two.
Thanks again.


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