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Review:academica says:
Hey there! I'm here with your requested review!

I really liked getting a chance to know Amelia here. The imagery you used when you talked about the garden was really stunning, and I liked being able to explore it with her, all the way up to the dramatic conclusion. It certainly seems like there is more to Draco than meets the eye, and I anticipate that Amelia will want to discover what he's hiding.

I do have a few critiques for this chapter. I noticed several places where there was awkward phrasing, incorrect punctuation, and misspelled words. As I mentioned before, I think a beta could help you smooth those mistakes over. The other thing is that I couldn't quite understand why Draco would need Amelia's hair to help with the cabinet, so I would consider expanding a little on how she provided a good "cover" for him, just in case I'm not the only one missing the point that you're trying to make.

I like the pacing here, particularly the fact that Draco is still struggling with his prejudices and hasn't just fallen head over heels for Amelia. If anyone could change Draco's heart, I'll bet it's Narcissa, and it was nice to see her jump in briefly and show that she, at least, has changed a bit. I'll be looking forward to see how Draco and Amelia's relationship develops and how whatever will happen to Narcissa will change their interactions.

Very nice! As always, feel free to re-request, and I hope this review is helpful to you.

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I greatly appreciate the time that you put into doing this.

I am glad that you enjoyed getting to know Amelia and the imagery I used to describe the garden. Amelia is very curious about what is going on with Draco. He is an awkward guy going through a lot at one time and he has all these racing thoughts.

I just came into contact with someone who is willing to help Beta this story for me. So hopefully things will be better as time goes on. Chapter 6 hasn't been sent to the queue yet so hopefully I can turn somethings around. Good point on elaborating with that. I will see what I can do to clear that up. Thanks for pointing it out.

I am glad that the pacing is working. I would love to just throw them together, but real life isn't even like that. Narcissa plays a huge part in this story. I am glad that you are looking forward to see how it all develops between Draco and Amelia.

Thanks so much again and I will definitely re-request! =)

-SR17


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