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Review:Renfair says:
Oh man, if I had known there were cookies waiting for me here, I would have totally stopped in to snack all the way back to "Unwritten" before finishing it. Can I at least lick the mixing bowl?

"...and the process of planting an idea in her head was both risky and intricate." Ah, sounds like Lily is in need of some Inception! I still have such a hard time following that movie. It makes my brain hurt. But really, Sirius, don't you think maybe Lily might not want to move back into the house that a) she was trapped in for months while Voldemort was hunting her down b) her husband was lured from to be murdered by your best friend and c) Voldemort BLEW UP when she and Harry were nearly murdered as well... but Sirius hasn't ever seemed like one who thinks of complex psychological stuff like that. He doesn't have much sense of how events change people and always wants things to go back instantly to the way things were.

I would totally crack up if my toddler was running around saying "Bloody git! Bloody git!" Maybe it wouldn't be so funny if I was British, though.

"before they took off on their own like a skinny, underfed Dementor." --That was a great little simile there, and strangely cute in a way.

Aw, a puppy! Little puppy Fang!! I feel horrible that I didn't notice that he wasn't at Hagrid's hut in "Unwritten." What is it with me and ignoring the existance of animals in fan fiction? I wrote about 40,000 words of my new story before realizing I had completely forgotten about Avrille's cat.

Poor Hagrid... the simple incomprehensible logistics of a physical relationship with Dorcas still baffles me, but I think it's wonderful that you're writing someone into his life. Hagrid would make such a great husband and dad! Not that I think Dorcas would ever put up with something as inconvenient to her work like being pregnant... and maybe she's even too old. But it's nice that they both will have that companionship if she ever gets out of the slammer. Maybe it will make her not so married to the job (assuming she even has one, even if she's cleared).

Ugh, I'm still waiting for some real honest to goodness Snily in here, Siri! Please don't make me wait MUCH longer!!

Author's Response: You are right on target about Sirius not thinking of the complex issues behind Lily not wanting to move back to Godric's Hollow. Sirius just wants to fix things; I don't know whether he has really absorbed that their lives will never be the same again. He still wants to come over and hang out while Lily's cooking. And the idea of Severus being around is galling at best. (Sirius and Petunia ought to have something to bond over if they can stand to be in the same room with one another!)

Hagrid and Dorcas -- the odd couple of the Unwrittenverse -- if we can get her out of Azkaban in one piece and mentally stable, we'll see whether there's any hope for them (no spoilers here!)

Here's your mixing bowl! :) thanks for the thoughtful review!


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