Can I just say first: What's the deal with the word counts? There's only one word difference between the two first chapters and then you went and messed it up! You gotta count your words more carefully!?! :P
And the things you get me to do! I did really say "muggle muggers" five times fast. Or it might have been six, I lost count.
Anyway, now to the real review. :) I still love this! It's such a pleasure to read and there's humour and some sort of mystery/spy story coming up and such... realism I guess, with the rents to be paid and stuff. The details with the bonds and things make my head spin just a little as I know nothing about things like that in real life either (not being a criminal, not saying that you would be either though) and of course you've changed it a bit for the wizards. I like the fact that you've made them have a bit old fashioned ways in this too. It's a bit like insurance I guess?
I might just steal your Scorpius. Don't be too surprised if he's missing from later chapters. He loves musicals, like I do! He does the dishes! I absolutely need this guy (actually right now to do the dishes). And I love the way you write about Ron, like I said in my last review. You're neither bashing nor idealising him, nor nothing close to either. It's just right. Oh and talking about that, I also like the way you write about the Weasley-Malfoy family relationships, a little frosty, but not a Romeo and Juliet background for Rose and Scorpius.
I'm talking about all your characters and things in the latter part of the chapter, but I really did enjoy reading about the hunt for Butrus too. Just an overall great chapter like the previous too. :)
Author's Response: Dude I thought that was funny too, the word counts. I was tempted to add an adjective somewhere just to make them the same haha
The bond stuff, they actually don't have bounty hunters any more in the UK. Pretty much that's an American thing, but since the stories are based on the Stephanie Plum books I kind of had to keep that aspect of it. I translated it to the magical world as best I could. It works like a loan, really - if you can't afford to pay your bail, you borrow it from the bail bonds agency and they pay the courts and then when you go to court and get your bail back (it's like a monetary promise to show up for your court date, you give the court $500 and if you show up, they give it back), they keep a percentage of it as a fee. If you don't show up, the bondsman is out the money for your bail - the full amount. So they're motivated to bring in the people who skip their court date, even though they have to pay someone to do that.
I do like to keep the wizarding world a bit old-fashioned, cause they just seem to always be at least 50 years behind the times, you know?
Oh Scorpius. I wish he'd come do the dishes at my house too, and sing to me. I love a deep voice. I adore Ron, but yes he has his faults as a grown man - he's a dad, and a good dad, and Rose definitely idolizes her dad a bit but she's still in reality. And yeah, relations between the Weasleys and Malfoys are pretty much frosty to the two in the relationship and otherwise ignoring each other. Ron and Draco certainly don't talk cause their kids are living together. Definitely no Romeo and Juliet, they're so boring ;)
As much as I love writing a mystery, writing the Weasley family scenes are probably my favorite part of these stories. I had never written a mystery before this one (or a first-person POV story) and I really got to love it.
Thank you so much for reviewing!