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Review:Akussa says:
Hi! You're tagged!!

I found this hilarious, to be honest. Having gone through that just this past week, I can say that my boyfriend took it really well! At least he didn't faint!!

For a first one-shot, I found it was well done. You really did a good job with the descriptions and the characters. Blake is an interesting OC and I really liked him; he is engaging and seems like a really good guy.

One little thing bothered me in the middle of the story though. For some reason, you suddently changed your point of view from first person to third person. Here is the sentence :

"I was late for dinner especially when I promised to be there, tonight of all nights, our third anniversary. Apparating into entrance hall of their flat, Blake shrugged off his jacket and flipped off his shoes. “Molls, I’m home!” "

Change that second sentence's perception and the story will flow very nicely. Great work, I enjoyed it a lot!

Author's Response: Aghh! I had not noticed that! Thanks!

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