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Review:Calypso says:
This is a really well written and intriguing beginning.

I thought you handled the first scene very well with the intial confusion as she woke up, followed by the worry as she finds she can't remember her name and then the panic of her family as the reader finally realises what trouble she's in. However, I liked that you interspersed the whole chapter with humour- it made it less angst-y and I laughed out loud when she was wondering whose family all the crazy red-heads were :P
You have also made her character very interesting because she is trying to reconcile whoever she was with whoever she now finds herself to be; I think it will be interesting to see how that resolves :)
Also, I really liked the discussion she had with James, that was really intense and sounded like a conversation that might actually take place under the circustances.
So yeah, I thought this was a really awesome start to a story- you have lots to work with and enough mystery to keep the reader reading on which I certainly will be!! :)
-Calypso

Author's Response: Thanks so much.
I'm happy you liked it, this first bit has undergone a lot of re-writing.
I'm afraid I can't write without humour- I get too worried that people won't like it! Humour is always there in everyday life anyway.

Thanks for such a lovely review, and I hope you carry on reading :D xx


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