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Review:mirasoul says:
Hi! Mirasoul here, from the forums.

Wow. Just...wow. This was exceptional. Your imagery and metaphor use made me feel as if I was the one dancing among the clouds, grabbing hold of them, evaporating into mist...You paint beautiful pictures, you know that?

I don't really have any criticism of this. I guess my only qualm would be Hannah's brief dialogue. It seems a bit cheesy, cliche to me, you know? If it had been a thought she had rather than something she verbally spoke I wouldn't be pointing it out, but it seems so...artistic. Too artistic to be spoken, in a way. Does that even make sense? Anyway, you don't have to change it; that was just one minor little thing to me. Otherwise this entire one-shot is absolutely beautiful. I especially love the glimpse of hope you added in with the last sentence. Reminds of the famous Dumbledore quote: "Happined can be found even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light." :)

~Mirasoul

Author's Response: Eeks thank you for your kind words!! *blushing* i'm so amazed by your reaction to it that i had a smile on my face for ages. I'm glad you enjoyed the picture i attempted to paint. ;)

Ah, i guess i get where you are coming from with her dialogue. I was probably too caught up in the rest of the narrative to focus on her original voice. If i can think of something better that is more real i'll try to add that in as well.

Gosh though, thank you for your lovely words and i'm so pleased that you enjoyed it. *hugs*

zay


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