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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums back to review for you after far too long! :D So, let's go over things:

Grammar/Spelling: There were several errors that I noticed as I read this very long chapter. I think you'll catch them if you read through it or have a beta check it out. They're nothing terrible, but they are there.

Continuity Issues: 1. The Marauders never knew about the Room of Requirement. It wasn't on the Marauders Map. Hence, they never knew about its existence. 2. When Sirius comes to see Caprice in the middle of the night, she checks the time on her alarm clock. Alarm clocks wouldn't work in Hogwarts. :]

Characterization: I loved Sirius in this chapter. He's so sweet and sad. I felt awful for him. I really hate that he's hurting. You portray him so well that I definitely feel bad for him when he's upset. And Caprice was starting to think of letting him back in which I'm really happy about. I'm glad that she sees that she's been unfair to him. You showed that in a very realistic way.

Descriptions: I think you did very well with the scene at the end of the chapter. I was really surprised that something like that happened. I can't believe it! And Nora. Oh my gosh. I have no words.

Emotions: I mentioned that Sirius' emotions are really striking, and I should add that the panic at the end of the chapter was incredibly poignant. It was very realistic and dramatic and horrifying. Great job.

Plot: Things are moving along. I can't wait for Caprice and Sirius to get back to being friends already! And get together, for goodness sakes! But the real plot element that I'm obviously focusing on is the Death Eater attack. I can't believe that they attacked Hogsmeade. What on Earth is going to happen to all those people? I wonder who else is injured or dead. Ah! :[

Interactions: When Sirius came to talk to Caprice, I almost creid. I felt so bad for him. I hate that he gave up. She had better explain herself really well so that he's her friend again. Because he's awesome. And she needs him. Ugh.

Style: Beautiful job with that attack scene. You're doing wonderfully.

Pacing: I'm glad things are picking up again after a couple of filler chapters. I'm really excited to see what happens next.

You're doing great. I'm sorry for the delay between my reviews. I'll read the next chapter soon, I promise. :]

--Emily

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