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Review:Keira7794 says:
Hello :)

Ooh a Hermione/George! I usually ignore this pairing at all costs because although part of me thinks they'd make such a cute couple - my love for Ron is too strong! Haha - but you've really shown the positive attributes of this pairing really well.

You've really caught Hermione's strong personality with her desire to do good and follow the rules mixed with the usual teenage angst of worrying what others think of her. You've shown a different side of her and I love how when she doesn't know what to do or how she really feels, Hermione will explode with anger instead - this is very much like the Hermione from the books!

My only slight confusion was over the 'silently agreeing of not telling anyone but Ginny and Fred'. Obviously Fred and George are twins and would tell each other everything, but Ginny seems a slightly odd choice. To me, Ginny is one of Hermione's friends and they are close in the holidays due to lack of other female company but I wouldn't have seen them as confidents at this stage - but that's just me and my awkward view! :P Though perhaps some description of Ginny and Hermione's relationship would fit really well?

Your beginning is brilliant and overall your entire chapter is very believable, though after the kiss things seem to speed up very quickly. Of course, some relationships just spark from the beginning but Hermione has always seemed a little more reserved and I found her helping with the black-market a little ...stretched? But once again that's just my head canon getting in the way! :P

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this and am looking forward to reading more of Hermione and George's adventures. :)

Keira :)

Author's Response: Hello!

To me they sort of are an extremely cute couple which is why I like them and it was very nearly canon according to JK but I do love Ron too!

Hermione is a hard character to write especially because of her inner conflicts. I try to make her believable but at the same time she doesn't know how to react herself about it.

The thing about telling Ginny and Fred is sort of hard to explain but it is seriously needed within the rest but I will try and go back and explain it all. Ginny is a very influential character within this story and she sort of needs to be included within this!

I'm really glad you liked it and I know it does move a little quickly but in a way I tried to make Hermione let loose a little bit and of course she will need to be a little bit stretched to make it work completely


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