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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Okay, last review from me! Feel free to return to my review thread on the forums if you update!

Grammar/Spelling: There were a few errors in this chapter that you seem to have missed, but I'm sure a read-through will help you spot them. They weren't huge or ostentatious, but they're there.

Characterization: Hermione's so hardcore! I'm surprised she didn't use magic against the claims woman sooner. She's smart enough to know that time is of the essence.

Descriptions: We got a few mentions of how things looked here, and that really helped bring things to life. You could add more if you'd like, and that couldn't hurt.

Emotions: I think it could have helped to show Hermione's panic more when she thought the woman wouldn't let her have the mirror. But other than that, things were okay.

Plot: Well, they're almost to Hogwarts. I wonder how things will go when Hermione reaches Godric. Better hope she can summon him out to carry that mirror!

Interactions: That woman was so frustrating! I'm glad Hermione dealt with her. Very good addition with their argument.

Good job with this chapter! You've been doing quite well. Keep up the good work.

--Emily

Author's Response: No worries even if she isn't able to summon him out of the mirror just yet, she can always levitate the mirror to the rental car. :)
I am glad that so far you have found my story interesting. I have had a lot of fun writing it. To think that there are only about ten more chapters to go before the story is over.
It wont be long until they get to hogwarts and things start to really pick up. Thank you for all the insight and reviews they will be quite helpful when I am doing edits.

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