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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

This was really sweet and touching, from start to finish. I thought you did a terrific job of capturing Ginny's feelings for Harry, both in terms of the obsession that she's had with him since she was very young and the very real need to be with him that she's developed over the years. This embodied the full range of her desire, from the very immature all the way through to a more grown up sort of connection.

The way you continuously repeat the words "love him" and "miss him" really helped to reinforce the single-mindedness of her purpose. By the end, it made perfect sense why she was set on doing what she was planning to do.

As far as constructive criticism, I'll start with a small thing:

"There was times this spring when we got close..." - should be "There were..."

Aside from that, I think it would have been interesting for you to explore more of Ginny's feelings aside from just the way that she misses and loves Harry. She says that she needs him, specifically that she needs him to survive. I thought you could have expanded on that quite a bit. What does she see in her own future? What are her fears and anxieties? And where does Harry fit in all of that? How does her decision to "take him" help her with this uncertain future?

Overall, I thought this was very nicely written. Even though it was short, you captured a very poignant moment from the books and even managed to end it on a note of dry humor.

Author's Response: Thank you for a thoughtful and lovely review!

I'm glad that you appreciated how I tried to piture Ginny both as a very young and naive girl, and as a mature and determined young woman.

I'm happy to get some cc on this fic too. I guess I could elaborate more about her feelings.

Thank your for pointing out that grammar mistake too! (It's just the kind of mistake I frequently tend to make, since I'm not a native English speaker...)

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