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Review:CambAngst says:
Awesome, a new chapter!

My first question is about the chapter title. It seems like an odd choice, since she doesn't settle on her destination until very late in the chapter. Just something to think about.

I was curious as to what, exactly, Pansy attached to the back of her door. A bank statement? A note to herself? It's not important in the great scheme of things, I guess, but it made me wonder.

After the last chapter, I was hoping that maybe Astor would draw Pansy out of her solitude somewhat. That maybe she would decide to take the dog for a walk to show it off, for instance. I know it probably wouldn't have ended well, but the idea was still interesting. I guess she is less lonely now, and it sounds like she's even spending a little more time around the elves as they train the dog, so it's not all bad.

What am I to make of the fact that her reflection has deserted her? Or is avoiding her, perhaps. Is this a sign that she's getting better? Or merely a sign that her reflection finds her boring now that she spends all of her time studying or with the dog? I'm curious.

I really like where you took Pansy's idea of doing something to improve her standing in the community. At first, I was thinking that maybe she would volunteer to help war orphans or something fairly noble. (Pansy babysitting Teddy for a day. Now there's a funny concept...) Silly me! I forgot who we were talking about. I love how you manage to keep her sort of childlike and delusional, even as she's trying to act more like an adult, or at least what she thinks proper adults act like.

Off she goes to buy dog food. Should be an adventure!

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review yet again! I really appreciate it. And as for the chapter title- well, I definitely see your point and will be changing it. The last scene of the chapter is actually the first part of another scene, one that takes place in Diagon Alley. I guess that when I was thinking about a title, I forgot that I'd saved the majority of that scene for the next chapter.

As for what Pansy has attached to the back of her door: I'd imagined it as a note to herself. The thought of it being a bank statement never crossed my mind, though it would work just as well for Pansy's purpose.

The reflection's disappearance isn't a sign of boredom- it leans more to a sign of improvement in Pansy's condition. Pansy has found a purpose with the restoration of her family's reputation and a companion in Astor. However, I can tell you that the reflection will make several more appearances in the future- Pansy is far from being mentally stable.

I'm glad that you liked Pansy's decision- I had fun writing that scene because Pansy's thoughts can be so different from everyone else's and yet she still believes that she's doing something radical, that she's making a sacrifice.

Once again, thanks for reviewing and I hope to have the next chapter out soon!


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