Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Broken Butterfly says:
Hi MymyMiss
I think that the story is good. I like the flow of the story, the description that you use the way you explain a little about why the lawsuit is occurring. I can't really review on characterization because i'm not all that familiar with Seamus as a main character. Fred and George seem true to their characters. It made me laugh when he got sucked into the bottle. Curiosity killed the cat you know? I like how you expand the chapter length to fit what the chapter needs to fit, with just enough description so as to not make it boring for lack of information or boring for over load of information. However the chapter does seem to start off without really telling a story, you change that in the middle but it begins with more of a description to what is going on. In my opinion at least. That does take a little bit away from your story and when you edit this I would consider that (I can't make you any suggestions as to how) I know it is hard and I struggle with the same issue in my own stories. I like the emotions that your story makes me feel, happy, curious, and interested. I like how you incorporate both humour without being over dramatic with it and also a sense of just a dramatic element. From reading this chapter I wouldn't classify the story as humorous although there are parts that have an aspect of humor. Which I think is great. I'm not a reader who reads comedies, and too much humor in a story takes my interest away from the story, but on the other hand a story with out humour is dull. Humor is an important element for a story and you blend it in very well. You are able to tell a story and I can see that from reading further into this chapter aside from the describing beginning, (those darn beginnings are so hard to write well.) I really did enjoy this chapter and I compliment your writing skills.
Broken Butterfly

Author's Response: thank you so much for the review!! :)

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 366
Submit Report: