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Review:Elenia says:
Hi ^^

I'm so happy that you updated this story. Even though I'm dying to read the next chapters of 'Heaven Can Wait' and 'Caprice', I'm even more anxious to see where you're taking this story! The plotline is just so original and intriguing, so you should definitely update this one more often!

Loved the beginning! It pulled me right back where the previous chapter ended and helped me remember what had happened.

Daphne is such an interesting character. I think you've done a great job with her; the social awkwardness, the headaches, her temper, they all make me want to learn more about her and to see how she copes with future challenges.

And Callum! I really can't decide what to think about him. I really want to believe he's on the good side, helping Daphne to learn how to use her powers and all. But I don't know, somehow I get the feeling that he might be just doing it all to gain her trust and to get in her good books. Hope I'm wrong though, because I like his character. Oh well, I'll just have to wait and see (:

The part where Callum taught Daphne how to float the feather was brilliant! It was like a scene in movies, where something exciting is about to happen, and the music starts playing stronger and faster, accelerating every moment and then suddenly - silence. I got that from your scene, so I think did an excellent work with that one!

Also liked that Daphne didn't immediately succeed with everything, but that she realised she had a lot to learn. That makes her more believable. Callum demonstrating his powers was also very interesting, and again made me question his ultimate beliefs. Maybe it's just because creating fire seems to be his favourite skill. It's just such a powerful element and can easily cause so much destruction and havoc that it makes me wonder if he really is a good guy...

Then the ending! Who is this cloaked stranger then? Creepy stalker was my first thought, but then I started to ponder that if Callum is possibly the bad guy, then this guy could be the good one, and he/she is keeping an eye on Daphne, to make sure she's okay.

Write faster, okay? ^^

Oh, and I'm hoping this was a good enough review to get an update on 'HCW' soon? d:

Take care!

~E

Author's Response: Hey Elenia! Wow this review really blew me away! THANK YOU SO MUCH! honestly it's just what I needed to give me inspiration you know?

I felt a tiny hint of the previous chapter was needed as there's been a big gap between the chapters. :) I'm glad you like that bit. Caprice has hit a bit of a snag but I've already drafted the next chapter I'll get it out asap after my exams.

I'm really glad that you like this story as well. Its a rather different approach than I'm used to so it's good to know that where i'm going with it looks good so far.

Daphne is a vey interesting character to write and i'm glad she's interesting to read too. She's got a lot of power but she's afraid to use it or even accept it and she's got these paranoid ideas and angst mixes with misunderstood personality. I really like her character and I'm trying very hard to keep her away as much as possible from a Mary Sue.

Callum is essentially cryptic. I LOVE that everyone who reads about him is unsure of him, where he stands and what his game is. As such they dont know where their loyalty stands with Callum. I really have only felt that in movies with certain characters and I'm thrilled that i could bring that to a written character! I love Callum and I have big hopes for him.

The last scene is what I refer to as "The Breaking Scene" which is literally when Callum breaks Daphne into tapping into her powers. So as you can see i refer to my plot as scenes like a movie so I DO in face write like a movie, presenting things the way it happens in a movies :) its interesting for me.

As for the creepy stalker, I am impressed by your judgement on him but you'll have to wait and see... well hopefully not too long cos he'll make his grand appearance in the next chapter and he as a HUGE role in the story so do come back! :D

And as I said HCW is in queue :) THANK YOU SO MUCH E! You're an amazing reviewer!

~Cali


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