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Review:Ravenclaw_Charm says:
Hi! So sorry for the wait :P

As far as reading this blind, this chapter was much better. There weren't any plot holes or missing background :D

Grammar/Spelling:
I didn't find anything :)

Characterization:
I really, really, really enjoyed Rose's entrance. She's exactly like Hermione, which I found quite humorous :D You characterized her so perfectly! Greg is a great OC. I want to say he's very insightful, and I love his dialogue. Albus seems rather similar to Greg, and the way they just...click - it's great :D I want to see more of their relationship; you wrote it so well! I enjoyed reading his relationship with his aunt Hermione; it's a nice new twist. Your characterizations are just so good!

Other Babblings:
This chapter was very easy to read, and I really enjoyed it :) I can't wait to see what happens with Louis, though I have a feeling you won't get into it too much :P I love how you have a nice balance between description and dialogue, which makes the flow and pacing so great. Oh, and Arthur's appearance was brilliant; he won for best quote: "Grandfather of Rose...among others." :D

Again, sorry for being late! Amazing chapter! Feel free to re-request :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Real life gets in the way, doesn't it? Irritating like that.

I'm glad it all flows smoothly and the characters are starting to emerge and develop. I think Albus and Greg have a little bit in common, although the way I see it right now, Albus is still a very little boy in a lot of ways.

I had intended Arthur and Rose to have somewhat more secondary roles, but as I think about things, you're the second reviewer to comment on Arthur, and I reckon I might be able to wind him into proceedings for a Burrow Christmas... and even as I type this, I've found Rose taking a bigger role than I'd imagined in Chapter 8.

I'll re-request in your thread when the queue's cleared, and you can find out for yourself whether we see any more of Louis...


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