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Review:Ashling586 says:
For the beginning of a story I think this was a good start. I really liked the descriptions that you put into the very first few paragraphs.
Personally I would have liked a bit more information on Jane and Remus' past relationship and how it has effected their relationship at this time, but I still thought that you did a great job.
How did the boy that she knew from school get poisoned? Was it something he ate or exposed to unintentionally? I only ask because you spiked my curiosity when you mentioned that she stopped eating out and started testing anything she was about to consumed.
Since the muggleborns are being killed even after they are supposedly healed it makes me wonder whether or not a death eater has infiltrated St. Mungo's. Guess I will have to continue reading in order to find out more.
Good job.

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much!

I see what you mean about Jane and Remus's past relationship. I wondered whether to work more in, but I ended up not being able to find a way to do so that felt natural. I'll look at it again.

She's not sure how he got poisoned, but she suspects that he was poisoned. That's part of the difficulty for her - it's just so hard to know anything anymore.

Thank you so much for the review. :)

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