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Review:katti4493 says:
It's a good start! And an interesting pairing as well. There are far too many Lily/James, Lily/Sirius, Lily/Remus stories in this world for my liking. With this story, you will be able to take a whole new look at this time period from a different angle, and put your own spin on it! It seems like a good start in this respect, well done!

I think you just need to make sure you are not switching between first person/third person because it can be a little jarring for the reader. You started in third person by calling her "Katherine" and then started saying "I did this" etc. You really need to decide what style you are going to write in and stick to it.

I thought Regulus' characterisation was really good. He seems cold and heartless at the moment, but there is definitely potential for him to open up as a character. I will be interested to see how you change the ending of the story (is he going to stay alive?). I just hope you consider that sometimes being kind to your characters is not being kind to your writing, and can sometimes dampen the emotional impact of the story. I also thought you could have made Sirius' opinion of his brother a little more nuanced instead of just "he's evil" seeing as they were brothers and we know that Regulus wasn't evil.

I hope I haven't been too harsh but I really do think this has a lot of potential and I will read some more chapters!

Author's Response: Don't worry you aren't being harsh! I really appreciate any and all feedback. I hope you like the next chapters and you continue to read the story! Thank you for reviewing (:

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