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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Hello! This is Nymphie Tonks with your long overdue review! I want to start by apologizing about it being so late. I have had loads of homework and I have some huge exams coming up in 2-3 weeks here so all my spare time goes towards exam stuff. But today I have decided to take a break to do some catch up, so here I am!

For the most part, the story flowed quite well. I understood where things were going and I do not think anything was going too fast. I was a little confused about Remusí whereabouts in the castle though. He went from Filchís office to the Room of Requirement, which I donít think are on the same floors, so I was kind of cofused. I was also sort of questioning how Remus knew about the Room of Requirement. I know he was a Marauder and all, but Iím not sure if he would necessarily know about it.

And there was another thing I noticed that effected the flow, and that would be the tenses. There would be sections of present tense and sections of past tense and they would be intermixed. I know you had memories, which were fine in past tense, but youíd have sections of what was actually going on in past tense to, while other parts of what was actually going on in present tense to. So you may want to look closely at the verbs throughout to make sure they are the tense you intended them to be, as it got a bit confusing at times.

Other than those few things though, I saw no other problems. You really managed writing a stream of consciousness type thing quite well. It was easy to keep up with and I did enjoy reading it. Great job!

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Ha, it's no problem, I totally understand with homework and everything(:

I'm glad you think it was at a good flow, and I understand what you mean, I could have put more thought into where he actually was going, I really didn't think about that.
And I always kind of pictured in my mind that the marauders knew about the room of requirements.

And okay, I will go back and check on the tenses.

And thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it(:

~Sarah
Xxxx


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