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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
I loved the style of this! I like how you've been experimenting with your one-shots, changing the styles. It displays your amazing versatility as an author very well. I especially liked Severus's thoughts in parentheses - for some reason, this one in particular: (Did you know that I was sorry?) There's just something heartbreaking about it, his endless guilt and regret. It's so sad. But it's /so/ Snape.

I also loved this: It is for your son - Harry is only your son, Lily, and you cannot fault my mind for thinking it - that I am still in this world at all, as you wait in your unknowing always. It is for you.

I don't know if you used 'always' coincidentally - something tells me you did not - and I think it's so brilliantly fitting here. Your imagery is simple but beautiful, and now I'm picturing Lily just floating out there with the stars, her own constellation. You've presented us with a picture of Severus that just melts my heart - he's so small and lonely and the only thing he's got is a boy who's not even his, who looks just like James. He lives for a boy he can't stand. The way you wrote this, with the exclamation marks and just the general feel of it, sort of reminded me of Shakespeare for some reason. Everything about it just really goes with the tone of Severus and all that he was, and I think you did his feelings toward Lily tremendous justice here. The ending, with him facing his own mortality and the Always was the perfect touch. You should be so proud of what you do, Janechel. You have the ability to floor people with 500 words.


♥ I need to stop reading sad, lovely things that give me feels before bed. I demand a fluffy review response. The fluffiest you can manage.

Author's Response: Style experimentation is /so much fun/, which is such a nerdy thing to say, but the more I play with words the more I love them. :) I don't know if the fact that I wrote this at midnight contributed to its emotions, but I'd think to think that sleeplessness lent a ready ear to this. And if not, I can pretend so!

You /get/ my stories. You pick up on every subtlety and every emotion and I just. You do not even know how appreciated that is. (Well, you might, but I must tell you anew!) It's one thing to have someone read something you wrote and another entirely for them to /read/ it, if you get my meaning. Thank you. ♥

I am a mirror crack'd.
I am fabric, with strings long ago
cut away, as a world troops on.
This family isn't my family without you.
Kin is not kin.

You want to know truth?

Without you, I am not who I am.

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