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Review:SiriuslyPeeved says:
"You see, my dear friend has been the cause for most of the pain and torment in my life, and I am not being melodramatic. She's the reason I have so many scars, burns, bad hair days, detentions, enemies... the list goes on."

Love it! Steven's voice is so clear already even in this opening chapter, I hope you did well in your challenge!

"Let's just say don't kidnap and destroy Lucy's doll, she will retaliate and you will end up in St Mungo's ... for almost a week ... unable to walk."

Hee! Awesome. I hope more childhood stories of the Weasley kids and young Steven will emerge, this one was great!

My mechanical notes are mainly regarding the formatting, which is always frustrating for me to deal with as well. (I always have trouble with the spacing unless I use paste with plain text, or if it's really being stubborn, the simple editor. :) ) Other than that, perhaps you could consider splitting up some of your longer sentences (especially when there are "howevers" involved) and use semicolons, or break sentences into two for flow. Sometimes I like to read my own stuff out loud and if I run out of breath in the middle of a sentence, I break it off or use a semicolon.

I loved the ending, can't wait to see what hijinks ensue! I really enjoyed this, thanks for requesting!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for doing this review for me :D
I'm so glad that you think that about him, I did actually I came third :-D
I do plan on including more childhood stories, I've just got to think of some hehe.
I always have trouble with spaces on here, they make the gaps huge between the lines, I might try the simple editor, thanks for the tip.
Ooo that sounds like a good idea, I'm going to try that, thank you.
Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate you taking the time out to do it :-D

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