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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

Again, another brilliant chapter you have here.

I really thought that this was an insightful look as to how kids change as they grow and make new friends. I was terribly annoyed with Albus by the end of this chapter only because he should have known better. I am happy to see that he has gotten over his fear of Slytherin and that he has more of a backbone, but I was still stunned at his outburst. Daniel has still gives me mixed feelings because I almost feel like I sense something there that I cannot describe. Louis, bless him, seems to have more sense and I feel for him wanting to do the right thing to show them what things are about. I feel the worst for Nathan though...he is terrified by this point and I am glad that Louis is there to calm his fears a little.

I liked Louis and Nathan's pact to be friends no matter what where I think that Albus and Daniel kind of lack that connection from the off. Albus seems to look up to Daniel mostly because he is use to being shadowed by his brother James.

In all honesty I think they are all terrified, but this is how they all cope with it in their own ways. I think that there characters are starting to shine through more and into their personalities, mannerisms, and quirks more.

I am super excited at how well this is going and what houses they are going to be sorted into. I am also looking forward to how they cope and manage to being in those houses once placed there.

I hope that this isn't a confusing review and that it has been insightful. I know I kind of jumped all over the place.

Keep up the brilliant work!! I am adding this to my favorites!! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Kids are like that, eh? It's great that the characters are developing clearly and individually and showing their own traits. I'm trying to avoid the stereotype of Albus being a bit of a pushover, but fundamentally the way I see it here is that he's still massively insecure about his own identity, and has now - for better or for worse - decided that this is his way to escape James. I'm so pleased that the A/D friendship is clearly different to L/N. Subtleties FTW.

Sheriff :)

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