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Review:atellam says:
Hey there :) Here with your reviews from the Reviewing Competition, and thought I'd give your one-shot some love :)

First up, this was cute. I'm not really a Dramione shipper, but I still liked this. I'd work on the spacing though. There are giant gaps between each paragraph and it interrupts the flow when I have to scroll so far to see the next paragraph.

I'd also change the bit at the beginning where Draco refers to Harry and Ron as 'Potty' and 'Weasel'. I think that while he might refer to them by their last name, I think if Draco's a father now, he'd need to be more mature than that.

The dialogue seems a little forced in places, but it's not too bad, so don't stress.

Other than that, I enjoyed this a lot, and the idea was very cute. Keep up the good work, and I'll get on your other review soon :)

- Adele :)

Author's Response: Adele,

Well, thank you for reviewing my one-shot. I've almost forgotten about it. I wrote it pretty early in my writing. (though I consider what I write now as early but I know I've grow a fraction of an inch as a writer so far.)

I have the worst time working with the spacing on HPFF. I've tried to correct this many times so if you have some pointers they would be very helpful.

I will have to go back and read my work. I understand where you are coming from by stating Draco probably wouldn't use Potty and Weasel as nicknames. It's a bad habit I have as a writer wehn thinking from Draco's pov.

Thanks,

Megthechef43

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