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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

This was a very well done chapter!

I was thrilled to see Amelie or Amy growing up and seeing her placed in Gryffindor! =)

I really liked seeing all of the characters being introduced and getting to see each of their individual personalities come to life. I loved seeing how she interacted betweeen her friends.

I really enjoyed the choice of words that you used in and throughout the chapter...encumbered. It's such an under used word that I thought it was great to see it and others pop up throughout. You're wonderful at describing scenes in a subtle way that doesn't overwhelm what it is that you are trying to describe.

You do a great job bring Amelie's emotions to life especially when Sirius is around. I think you did a great job showing all of their mannerisms and quirks.

The flow and pace of this chapter was well done and smooth. It was a super long chapter, but I thought that you used the length of this to get the points you wanted to make come to life clearly rather than if you would have split it up.

Overall, you are a brilliant writer and you have done such a great job bringing your characters to life in a way that makes me see how much you actually love your OC and writing the characters you are wrting about. You have a great way describing your scenes and bring the emotions of all of these wonderful characters to life. The flow and pace is well balanced and I loved that you used words that I don't normally see in stories. I love that because it gives it its own feel to it.

Brilliant job! Keep it up!! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Thank you!

Yes, finally Amelie is grown up (somewhat - though not quite)!

I try to add words that are a bit more precise than the usual every day ones. Sometimes the words we use aren't really enough to explain a feeling properly, you know?

I really do love my characters, even now after so many years. I love that you are enjoying them too :) Looking forward to see how you react to the rest of the story!

Thanks again for taking time to review in so much detail!
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