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Review:academica says:
Hey Mary! Here from the TGS Review Exchange :)

So I'll admit, this was a little tough for me to follow not having read 'Unwritten' yet, but I did the best I could. As a result, I'll be commenting primarily on the things I could follow best.

First off -- ahh, the Snily. I loved it. I could really see the fine details of the tension between them, and it was like they weren't in love, they didn't hate one another, but they had this awkward, reawakened relationship that neither of them yet fully understood. I love your businesslike, restrained Severus, and the tenderness of your Lily, caring for the human parts of the situation. They're very much as I would imagine them to be in a situation like this one.

Your details even beyond the Snily were fantastic, in terms of description. I especially loved the part where Lily put her fists to her eyes and created a visual effect behind her eyelids. It made this whole chapter feel very real, and I appreciate the attention you paid to every breath, every sensation.

All in all, I'm very intrigued. You did a wonderful job of setting up a beginning that drew me in (and made me wish I'd already read Unwritten) and then ending with... not quite a cliffhanger, but something that left me wanting more. The pace of the chapter went smoothly and quickly, probably because I was so interested from start to finish. I imagine I'll be going back to Unwritten and then returning to read more of this piece, given my Snily love (and hopefully more time once the semester has concluded and finals are ceased).

Excellent work, and a pleasure exchanging with you! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much Amanda! I really waffled on what to put in the exchange; Unwritten has been done for a while but I know it's still on a lot of people's reading lists. I hope you do enjoy volume one when you get to it :)

Thanks especially for your comments on Severus' and Lily's character portrayal -- they are close friends and growing closer and both exhausted and stressed, and snapping at each other because it feels safe to do so.

Thanks again! :)


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